14%Delightful! I loved the realism of the flying class and the martial arts bit at the end was quite funny. Keep writing!
Reviews For The Thorn in the Sand
Date: 18 October 2006 - 04:38PM
Title: Bumpy Landings
Date: 18 October 2006 - 12:13PM
Title: Bumpy Landings
Go Chelsea! Very nice Mr Pump, very nice indeed.
Date: 27 September 2006 - 08:09PM
Title: Prologue: Owls and Ice Cream
I really like this story and it was interesting enough to keep me, well..... Interested. Keep on writing and post more soon, as the plot is really tantalising.
Date: 18 September 2006 - 04:22PM
Title: First Steps
I like the way this story is going! You show very well why Holly and Brian are Ravenclaws, especially in the way that they deal with Snape. The details of why Holly's doing of magic is so different from her parents and sister, are especially well done. And of course there is that nice little hint of future problems when the Parkinson girl sends her letter to her father.
There is only one quibble I've had with the story so far. It had seemed a little odd to have eleven-year-olds being attracted to one another and becoming, however innocently, boyfriend and girlfriend. And then I remembered that my first infatuation was in second grade, when I was attracted to a girl with long black hair and big eyes. I suppose such attractions are built in to the human race, and why and how they get triggered is very individual. It is obvious that it can precede puberty. I can see Simon's and Holly's attraction to each other leading to a very deep friendship and love well before the complication of sex arises.
What might you be writing further about the role of Destiny, for these two children? Keep writing!
Author's Response:
Well, there certainly wont be any 'complications' in this story! They are 2 youngsters who enjoy one anothers company, and you may have seen all the 'romance' your going to get.
The wands have a magic all of their own - maybe they are having an influence on the children?
You think the other letter's from Parkinson eh? Interesting.....
(And probably correct!)
Date: 16 September 2006 - 12:14AM
Title: First Steps
Brilliant! I only wish the stories would ccome out quicker! I have been obsessed with all the storys foeabout 3 weeks and i check back mabye 3 times a week!
Date: 01 September 2006 - 09:19PM
Title: Hats and Ghosts
Excellent! When do we get more?!
Author's Response:
I'm typing now.
Honest I am!
So glad you're enjoying it.
Date: 31 August 2006 - 05:38PM
Title: Hats and Ghosts
Woohooo! Glad she's not... like Hope - both in terms of the sorting and in knowing her way round the school. That bodes well for Holly having a slightly saner time at school than her big sister.
You're getting far too good at these cliffies. Write more! Faster! ;)
Author's Response: Mr Pump obeys whip cracking noises, and turns to the keyboard once more.........
Date: 30 August 2006 - 10:24PM
Title: Hats and Ghosts
Marvelous chapter! It really moves along and leaves me wanting more! Now I wonder what Simon was told by the Sorting Hat.
Author's Response: You'll get some clues about what the hat said to Simon in the next chapter. Maybe someone would like to write the whole scene as an outtake?
Date: 15 August 2006 - 10:03PM
Title: A History Lesson, and Chocolate Heaven
i absolutely love this story! ^^ holly and simon are so cute. i kinda miss hope and matt. please update sooner. ^^
Author's Response: We should see a bit more of Hope and Matt, but not for a while yet.
Date: 09 August 2006 - 09:30PM
Title: A History Lesson, and Chocolate Heaven
Author's Response: I think Holly's got a bit of a competitive streak concerning her sister. She can't match Hopes magic, but anything else is fair game for a bit of sibling rivalry.
Lovely chapter, Holly's certainly not making her sisters mistake is she? Claiming her man, before they even get to Hogwarts! :o)
Great fun throughout the chapter, and Holly's damp entrance was a hoot!
Author's Response: I think Holly's got a bit of a competitive streak concerning her sister. She can't match Hopes magic, but anything else is fair game for a bit of sibling rivalry.
Date: 09 August 2006 - 03:47PM
Title: A History Lesson, and Chocolate Heaven
You're settling into this story well now - I liked the contrast description at the beginning between the Muggle and magical worlds in particular, and it's good to see Brian in the flesh! Loved the ending ~ only a Potter could make that kind of entrance!
Author's Response: Thanks. I must admit the beginning came from one of Allie's suggestions. She's good, isn't she!
Date: 03 August 2006 - 04:58PM
Title: Prologue: Owls and Ice Cream
wheres harry? and whos matthew
Author's Response: Harry's around - and you'd better ask Imogen about Matthew
Date: 31 July 2006 - 11:04PM
Title: The Journey Begins
Author's Response: So glad you're enjoying it so far. I'm loving writing Chelsea - she gets all the best lines so far, but Holly will get to show her strengths soon. As for Simon - it's a case of 'wait and see'.
The scene with Chelsea at breakfast; fabulous! This is a girl who can befriend a Potter/Weasley without fear. I love her. I'll be looking for some serious strength in Simon if he is going to keep up with these two little women.
Author's Response: So glad you're enjoying it so far. I'm loving writing Chelsea - she gets all the best lines so far, but Holly will get to show her strengths soon. As for Simon - it's a case of 'wait and see'.
Date: 31 July 2006 - 06:32PM
Title: The Journey Begins
Oh, this is a fun story! Well done!
Author's Response: Glad you're enjoying it. It has been fun to write so far as well!
Date: 21 July 2006 - 08:17AM
Title: Chapter 1: New Friends
This is GREAT! But something keeps bugging me... that I have no idea what Hope and Holly look like. Apart from Holly's eyes.
Author's Response: You need to read Imogen's 'A Pensieve Affair' and 'Nil Desperandum' for Hope and Holly's back story. In fact, you want to read all of Imogen's work, because it's all brilliant!
Date: 13 July 2006 - 03:58AM
Title: Chapter 1: New Friends
I like this story, but I am wondering about Hope and Holly's brother. Will he ever be mentioned? I assume he is at Hogwarts.
Author's Response:
Thank you. If you check the forums (the 'Editing' thread), Imogen decided to remove Sam from 'Nil', so there is now only Hope and Holly.
Holly will have a relative at Hogwarts, though.
Date: 12 July 2006 - 10:25PM
Title: Chapter 1: New Friends
Aha! The plot thickens! You've made excellent headway with characterization, and piqued my interest enough to make me want to read more. You're doing just fine as a writer yourself, but just remember to always thank your BETA rreaders!
Date: 12 July 2006 - 10:23PM
Title: Chapter 1: New Friends
Aha! The plot thickens! You've made excellent headway with characterization, and piqued my interest enough to make me want to read more. You're doing just fine as a writer yourself, but just remember to always thank your BETA rreaders!
Author's Response: Thank you. I'm still learning here, and Allie is doing a great job BETA'ing my scribbles. She has already improved the next chapter out of all recognition from my first draft.
Date: 11 July 2006 - 05:11PM
Title: Chapter 1: New Friends
Ooh, I'm intrigued! Harry randomly pulling official papers out of his pocket made me giggle.
Author's Response: It's sort of a wizarding version of Dr Who's phsycic paper!
Date: 11 July 2006 - 05:06PM
Title: Chapter 1: New Friends
ooooo... the british museum. interesting... can't wait to see what's happening. And i was so excited to see a bit of Harry in this one.
Author's Response: This will be Holly's story, but Harry and Co will continue to make appearances.
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